Catches your heart poem?

well, first you use 'their' instead of 'there.' (line 6) A mistake like this questions the seriousness of your whole poem. In the title you use 'Mothers' instead of Mother�s. You are not so much writing a poem as writing an elegy. Count how many times you use the word 'she' -- too much repetition is tiresome. There is lots of feeling in your text, but it is only your feeling and your reader wants his own feeling, just as everyone does. Make us feel, use a surprising image. Yes, from poetry we want a surprise!